文章的連貫性和緊湊感是高考書面表達的一個重要評分標準,滿分作文有個共性,就是有效地使用了語句間的連接成分,為此,學會使用關聯(lián)詞,是提升書面表達質(zhì)量的重要策略之一。
有的同學在作文中使用過多簡單句,成了簡單句堆砌;有的寫復雜句時,動輒用so, and,then,but,or,however,yet等非但達不到豐富表達方式的目的,反而使句子結(jié)構(gòu)松散、呆板。為了避免這種現(xiàn)象,可以通過使用不同的關聯(lián)詞,不僅能夠豐富句型,而且還能夠把思想表達得更清楚,意義更連貫。
■ 金題解析
當前不少文學作品被改編成電影。有人選擇看電影,有人則喜歡讀原著。請你以“Film or book, which do you prefer?”為題,按照下列要點寫一篇英語短文:
1. 看電影:省時、有趣、易懂
2. 讀原著:細節(jié)更多、語言優(yōu)美
3. 我的看法及理由
【注意】
1. 詞數(shù):100~120 文章題目和開頭已給出(不計入詞數(shù))。
2. 參考詞匯: original work 或 book in the original (原著)
Film or book, which do you prefer?
Some of us think that it is better to see the film than to read the book in the original.
【寫作指導】
這是一篇提綱式半開放性作文。寫作時,我們既要注意漢語提示的要點,又要準確表達自己的觀點。因此,要分兩段寫出兩種不同的觀點,在最后一段寫出自己的觀點。高考書面表達新評分標準在語言運用上對同學們提出了更高的要求,即在考查短文語言表達準確性的基礎上,進一步強調(diào)用詞的得體性、表達方式的多樣性及語言的連貫性。因此,在寫作時,我們一定要盡可能多使用高級詞匯和復雜句型,要恰當使用連接詞、過渡詞,這樣的文章才能出采,才能得高分。
【參考范文】
Some of us think that it is better to see the film than to read the book in the original. The reason is that it takes less time to understand the whole story. Besides, the film is usually more interesting, and it is easier to follow.
Some others have just the opposite opinion. They think that they can get more detailed information from the original. Meanwhile, the language in the book is possibly more lively and beautiful.
Personally, I agree with the second view. Actually I have more reasons for it. I think I can stay at home, reading quietly in a situation of my own, and what’s more, I am able to better understand the author’s ideas. In a word, to read the original work is better than to see the film based on it.
【精彩點擊】
寫作要求我們就選擇看電影還是讀原著談談看法。作者在做到了要點齊全,內(nèi)容充實,語言規(guī)范,語法正確的同時,較好地運用句子間的連接詞,從而使文章結(jié)構(gòu)嚴謹,層次分明,邏輯性強。
①第一段中,besides一詞的使用,多角度說明人們選擇看電影的理由;
②第二段中,meanwhile一詞的使用,增強了語言表達的說服力;
③第三段中,what’s more一詞的使用,使作者在說明自己觀點時呈現(xiàn)較強的邏輯性和感染力。In a word用于總結(jié)前文,突出了主題。
■ 關聯(lián)詞的應用
文章段落之間的邏輯關系可以用啟、承、轉(zhuǎn)、合來概括?!皢ⅰ本褪情_頭, “承”是承接,“轉(zhuǎn)”是轉(zhuǎn)折,“合”是綜合或總結(jié)。
(1)用于“啟”的關聯(lián)詞語通常用在段落或文章的開頭: first, first of all, at first, in the first place, firstly, to begin with, to start with, recently, now, nowadays, at present, in recent years, in general, generally speaking, lately, currently等。例:
①Nowadays,a heated debate (discussion) about private cars is under way in China.
時下,人們正議論著關于私家車的話題。
②In the recent few years, millions of fast food restaurants have mushroomed all over China.
近幾年,中國涌現(xiàn)上百萬快餐店。
③Currently, there is a widespread concern over increasing traffic accidents.
時下,不斷增加的交通事故已引起人們的廣泛關注。
④First of all, doing exercise every day is of the utmost importance in keeping fit.
首先,每日鍛煉對保持健康至關重要。
⑤Generally speaking, the more you practice, the more skillfully you can write in English.
一般來說,多實踐,英語的寫作能力就越強。
(2)用于“承”的關聯(lián)詞語通常用在段落中的第一個擴展句中: second, similarly, in addition, besides, then, furthermore, moreover, what is more, what is worse, for example, for instance, certainly, surely, obviously, in other words, especially, particularly, in particular, indeed, still, third, truly, in fact, at the same time, no doubt等。例:
①The answer to this problem involves many factors. First, . . . Next, . . . Last, . . .
解決問題的方法涉及兩方面,首先,……其次,……最后,……
②The following factors account for the problem. On the one hand, . . . On the other hand, . . .
以下原因?qū)е铝诉@一問題, 一方面, ……另一方面,……
③As a matter of fact, it is health rather than wealth that counts.
事實上,健康才是最重要。
④What is more serious is that we do not cherish the wildlife.
更嚴重的是,我們不珍惜野生動物。
⑤In addition, we should not neglect that everyone wants a friendly and peaceful society.
此外,我們不應忽視每個人都想要一個溫馨祥和的社會。
(3)用于“轉(zhuǎn)”的關聯(lián)詞語通常用在段落中的第二個擴展句中: but, however, on the other hand, on the contrary, in contrast, in any case, at any rate(無論如何), nevertheless(雖然如此), otherwise, or, or else, while, whereas, but, despite, in spite of ..., yet, instead等。例:
①However, this idea is now being questioned by more and more experts.
這一想法卻受到越來越多的專家質(zhì)疑。
②But just as a coin has two sides, tourism inevitably has its disadvantages.
凡事都有兩方面,旅游不可避免地有其缺陷。
③Parents complain their children are behaving unreasonably while the children declare their parents to be old-fashioned.
父母抱怨孩子行為不端,孩子則認為父母太落伍。
④In spite of these changes, the liberation of women has not been completed realized.
盡管有些變化,婦女解放仍未完全實現(xiàn)。
⑤On the other hand, some examinations fail to measure how the students have really studied.
相反,有些考試卻難以真正衡量學生學識。
(4)用于“合”的關聯(lián)詞語通常用在段落的結(jié)論句或文章的結(jié)論段中:in a word, in general, in short, above all, after all, generally speaking,to sum up, finally, in conclusion, at last, in summary, therefore, as a result, above all, thus,after all, eventually, hence, in sum(總之), on the whole(就整體而言), to sum up等。例:
①Last but no least, the shortcoming in education is the cause contributing to juvenile delinquency.
最后,但并非最不重要,教育上的缺失是助長青少年犯罪的原因。
②For these reasons, we can conclude that receiving college education is wise.
基于這些原因,我們可以得出結(jié)論:接受大學教育是明智的。
③Therefore,it takes longer time and more energy to communicate in written English than in oral English.
因此,書面語交流比口語需要更多時間和精力。
④In short, environmental pollution is the major problem to be solved to make our world a better place in which to live.
總之,要想生活安逸,必須解決環(huán)境污染問題。
⑤From what has been discussed above, we may safely draw the conclusion that advantages of bicycle far outweigh its disadvantages and it will still play essential roles in modern society.
通過以上討論,我們可以得出結(jié)論:自行車的優(yōu)點遠大于缺點,并且在現(xiàn)代社會它仍將發(fā)揮重要作用。
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